simile for my heart beating as fast as..?

Im writing a story about a girl finding out some very bad hospital results..

im starting of the story with her sitting in the waiting room waiting for her results,What simile could i use any ideas? my heart beating as fast as..

4 Answers

  • Kay
    1 month ago

    what about. “My heart is beating as fast as the hooves of a horse on a racetrack.” Or,”My heart is beating as fast as a Cheetah going for the kill.”

  • Green
    1 month ago

    firstly, don’t write a story intent on using a certain piece of figurative language – indeed, I used to write essays which were full of ‘flowery’ language but lacked any substance. Having said that, I like the idea of starting in the waiting room, allowing the suspense to build up. You could try:

    – My heart was beating like a cheetah chasing prey.

    – My heart was out of control, it jumped as if prompted by an electrical surge.

    – My heart danced with the ticking of the hospital clock.

    Good Luck.


    I like Kay’s comparison to the horse. You should consider that!

  • Bella Nicolson
    1 month ago

    my heart beating fast as a hummingbird’s wings

    my heart beating as fast as an alarm clock


    my heart beating so fast it feels like a hum.

    my heart fluttering like a butterfly learning to fly.

    my heart feeling like a fly in a cobweb, with nothing to do but wait.

    I really like the idea of your could email me some of it? 🙂

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    even if you don’t use them good luck 🙂

  • ?
    5 days ago

    Thx for the answers everyone <3

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